I started it as something else, something heroic but a sudden change of thought process and it ended up like this, very kiddish and a bit funny (hope so :P)*Modified last stanza on public demand,hehe
A knight strolls out
on the withered night
beaming his armour
to wage a fight
The night is young
and breeze is dark
but nothing in world
can snuff the spark
that burns inside
to wage a fight
against the evil
face to face
to make the world
a better place
Some shadows move
across the town
The horse is whipped
to follow around
An empty stretch
beyond the street
Its time for them
to feel the heat
They corner him
exchange of words
We have a gun
now part with sword
Remove the armour
the mask from the head
Now go to your home
and sleep in your bed
18 comments:
Hahaha..CUTE!!
Loved the title:-)
Maseeha bechara..kat gaya uska:P
Hahaha, bada bond bana fir rha tha :P
is it kiddish because of this part
"to make the world
a better place"?
it is funny, and really cute :)
but i suppose ending could've been more rhyming.. but as usual, splendid extravaganza for all... a nice cute poem.... kat gaya saale knight ka... he he..
Hahaha nice! Last lines could've been betta...seems like you finsihed it off for the heck of finishing :|
Anyway it was a nice read!
lolz
nice..a sudden shift indeed
might have been much longer and very very different from this had you continued in the direction you had started in
but nice irony :)
Y Afghanistan? Wahan kya hai?
Chacha:Tumhare comments tauba tauba ! Choke le lo har baat pe...nahi, its kiddish because of the way it is written.
Rohit:hehe, thanks and cute, well, I don't expect that word from the mouth a male, somehow, hehe.About rhyming, yes it could have been, agree but I always feel that there is more to poems than rhyming :-)
Skeety-Bingo ! You got it right, was in the office and had to leave so just wrapped it off, hehehe, thanks..and this ain't sad :D
Umang-Welcome back madamji...yes, but was a bit reluctant to put more efforts at the time of writing so had to come up with something which can end it up abruptly.I hope you liked it :-)
Skeety-The lazy bum I am, its nothing but not doing any blogger settings and living with the default ones :P
one word from me...cute :)
yup yup i liked it :)
Rashi-Thanks :)
Umang: Thanks fir to :P
ctnly, i at times do things not expected out of me :), newaz, it's a nice poem for sure.. and yes there is lots more than rhyming, accepted... :)
continue the good work sarkaar...
Lijiye sir, ab to rhyming bhi thik kar di :)
Looks like am not the only one who thinks this piece of art is cute:P
Ye kiski taraf ishara kiya ja rha hai mohtarma :P
Ummm errrrr...lol
lol :D
u r always welcome ji :) :P
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