Friday, April 18, 2008

Tranquility II


Water competing for transparency

Against the walls of opaque ice

Life flowing down the drain

Soaking every thread and grain

Traversing through the veins

Sedating every cell in me

Dissolving in the blood

The bitter flood

82 comments:

crasiezt said...

Finally the shayar is back...and how!

Damn you for writing such an awesome poem about alcohol...I feel like deleting the crap I wrote:-( But my pic was better:P

You don't drink, but you described the effects in a much nicer way than most drunkards! Clapping clapping:D

I want some right now!!

Anvita said...

OMG, i didnt know u were a kavi also....wah wah, too good mate, told ya na earlier day by day yur just getting batter n better.....

N u dont drink, i wudnt be able to say that unless i didnt read wat crasiezt had to say

impressed again!

Ankur said...

u write well..

but i see a lot of sadness... y so?

daru toh gum bhulane ke liye hai mere dost!!!

Cheers!!!

Macadamia The Nut said...

Were you drunk?
;) Just kidding

Reeta Skeeter said...

Oye Hoye!
Ki likh ditta!
Back to what you do best :P
I lovey this one...bitter flood..Aye!

gunj said...

if not fo d pic...mujhe kabhi na samajh aata janab madira ki baat kar rahe hain!!

geet said...

fuck it... tablets are enough to sedate me buddy .. shit it is ... :-(

pray ki main zinda bach jaaun to have a taste of my bacardi ...

Multifuncional said...

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Keshi said...

I wanna drink til I hv no life left in me.

Keshi.

Alok said...

Brilliant!

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Shayar ! Sunte hi majnu, devdaas wali feeling aati hai :|
And your poem wasn't crap, I liked it, it was fun and honest. And indeed your pic was better, you are the one with "Models wali jawline" afterall :P

Thanku thanku, am very happy that you liked it and as for the want, will make you some tangy cocktail :D

Gonecase said...

Anvita:
Hey, thanks a lot. I wonder you never noticed that there are more poems on my blog than the sum of all other types of posts :D

And yep, I don't drink :)

Gonecase said...

Ankur:
Thanks a lot. Aur gum hai tabhi to bhulana hota hai mere bhai. Baaki its just a post, neither daaru, nor gum here. Welcome and keep visiting :)

Gonecase said...

Macadamia:
Yep, high on water :P

Gonecase said...

Reeta:
Thanku ji, been a long time :)

Gonecase said...

Gunj:
Itni bakwas hai kya ????

Gonecase said...

Geet:
Abey oye, get well soon ! May god shower all the bacardi on you, Amen !!

Gonecase said...

Multifuncional:
Thanks :)

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
May lord bless you with all the money and spare kidneys to afford that, hic :P

Gonecase said...

Alok:
Thanks and welcome !

Keshi said...

who wants spare kidneys if the aim is to drink til I hv no life in me? :)

Keshi.

crasiezt said...

Hahaha majnu aur tu...biggest joke ever:P

I know you liked my poem. You're the reason I even posted it:-) FU for that jawline comment. Grrrrr

Vaise it's difficult to say what's better...your poem or the cocktail:D Loved both..sooooo much. Mmmmuah my personal bartender:D

Anvita said...

hmmm frankly i havent yaar, have been damn busy off late my frist week i started to blog n i was fine bloody uske baad se i have been busy, but i shud read yur other poem soon....until then rock on....i still cant digest u dont drink....bada sharif banda hai yaar

Gypsy said...

didnt have a clue you were talking about drink. flowing drown the drain?? sad, i say! :)

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
The longer you hang on to life, the more time you have to drink :P

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Oye majnu jaisi feel bola...itni buri haalat nahi hui hai ki majnu ho jaun :D
And thank you ji, I feel honoured ki meri wajah se aapne apna wo masterpiece blop pe chipkaya. And since you are finding it difficult to choose one, enjoy both, hehehe, mmmmuah !

Gonecase said...

Anvita:
Busy on personal front or busy on blogging scene ??
Par not drinking ko sharafat ka criterion kyon mana jaata hai. Mere liye to acha hi hai waise, hehehe

Gonecase said...

Gypsy:
Was it that bad ???

quarterpastseven said...

I am very impatient when it comes to poetry and try to avoid reading OR writing it :P So I appreciate anyone who can read/write/patiently analyze it :D

*Life flowing down the drain*

Dude! why? heheh it's just thoda sa daaru

*Sedating every cell in me*

again, dude!

*The bitter flood*
sigh!

And no, I don't drink as well. But I think people when drunk look funny and stupid. It's okay if not overdone, right?

Sutta said...

Waaaaaoooo!!

I mean, really Waaaaoooooowwww!!
Utterly strong and immensely deep piece of writing!!

Take a bow, Saaarrr. :)

chacha said...

"Water competing for transparency
Against the walls of opaque ice"

.... and then somebnody said it was about alcohol

last line say so too... yaar prose hi likha kar... may be poem is too hard to go down well with me, i was not able to appreciate and enjoy, honest as usual... OR explain maadi.

Gypsy said...

:) didnt mean it was bad.. i just didnt get it till i started reading the comments

crasiezt said...

Of course I'm enjoying both. Dono tere hi to product hain ladke:D

Maine majnu kahan banaya tujhe...I was referring to the "feeling" which is so not you!

Super weird that a lotta people didn't understand that you wrote this lovely piece about alcohol, and had to read the comments to figure out:P

Keshi said...

If Im drinking to death, Im not hanging on to life right? LOL!

Keshi.

Friendly nextdoor guy said...

wah bhai wah
chup te fatte
phor ditte t-tte

nazaara aa gya !!!

Rashi said...

wow is the word...I am in actual meaning and sense...awed !

b'ful idea, nicly put, simple and precise...gr8 piece...

Gonecase said...

Quarterpastseven:
LOL, yes...it is funny as long as they are not puking. Moreover, I am not saying anywhere that drinking is bad :P

Gonecase said...

Sutta:
Thanks ver much :D
but me no saar :( I am happy being sarji :P

Gonecase said...

Chacha:
Arre itna load kaahe lete ho chacha...jo inferece nikalta ho thik hai, kuch bhi nahi nikalta ho to ignore maadi, hehehe

Gonecase said...

Gypsy:
k :)

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Ab saare teri tarah BOND nahi hote na :P

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
If death is the motive and not drinking, why waste so much money and alcohal, there are cheaper means :P
Kidding, got your point :D

Gonecase said...

Friendly Guy:
Kaade t-tte phorte bhraji :P
waise dhanwaad ji !!

Gonecase said...

Rashi:
Thanks very much :)

crasiezt said...

:D

Keshi said...

o gawd!

Keshi.

Keshi said...

**If death is the motive and not drinking, why waste so much money and alcohal, there are cheaper means

wut wud u possibly gain by saving money when ur a dead man? LOL!

Keshi.

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Mmmmmuah chamiya :D

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
O C'mon Keshi, don't be all so-selfish now. I was talking about saving money and alcohal for all the near and dear ones left behind :P

Akshay said...

Love the lines "Life flowing down the drain, soaking every thread and grain"

Keshi said...

lol that argument isnt valid at all!

Keshi.

crasiezt said...

Mmmmmmuah mere tinde:D

Sutta said...

Saar, aapke keyboard ki ink khatm ho gayi kya?

Kuch likhte kyun nahi. :P

Gonecase said...

Akshay:
Thanks and welcome :)

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
LOL, agree :D

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Mmmuah :D

Gonecase said...

Sutta:
Nahi bhai, ink to khtm nahi hui, samay ka abhaav hai thoda ...jaldi hi kuch aayega :D

Macadamia The Nut said...

Ah! interesting :D

AlterinG Abhishek said...

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

Keshi said...

here's some news for ya GC:

u havent updated ur blog in a while.


LOL!

Keshi.

elusive said...

i cudnt agree less keshi :p update update

crasiezt said...

Aila another one!!
Mmmmuah

BIG Omi said...

Waise i dont drink... but somehow liked the word's-play... too kewl.. to read..
Take care..
Omi

Tairebabs said...

My brain can't handle alcohol but am definately always high on water!!! Nice play on words.

Gonecase said...

Macadamia:
Thanks :)

Gonecase said...

AA:
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm :D

Gonecase said...

Keshi:
Yep! Been very busy lately !!

Gonecase said...

Elusive:
Will will :D

Gonecase said...

Crazy:
Hehehe :P

Gonecase said...

Big Omi:
Thanks Man ! Don't drink myself though !!
Welcome :)

Gonecase said...

Tairebabs:
Lol, thanks and welcome :)

geet said...

abey ..tu ab paise kamaane laga gaya blog ke zariye hainn!!

Anvita said...

hey hey how are u?
mate i have been busy on the work front yaar....

btw its great that u dont drink but u can think like someone who does.....gosh i still dunno how ppl do that yaar....

Pranay said...

Hey. Great Blog dude....and awesome lines here....

Pranay said...

Hey. Great Blog dude....and awesome lines here....

geet said...

post update karne ke bhi paihe lega tu ???

nefariousoutlook said...

good one dude!! nicely written ..simple and brilliantly articulated :)
keep posting

Gonecase said...

Geet:
Oye yaar abhi to dukaan kholi hai, kamai shuru to hone de :P

Gonecase said...

Pranay:
Thanks man and welcome :)

Gonecase said...

Anvita:
Hey, am good. Been very busy myself....and as for thinking, usmein kya hai, don't drink but have seen many drinking, its easy, hehehe :D

Gonecase said...

Geet;
Oye yaar, busy si, hun update karta :D

Gonecase said...

nefariousoutlook:
Thanks very much and keep visiting :)