Water competing for transparency
Against the walls of opaque ice
Life flowing down the drain
Soaking every thread and grain
Traversing through the veins
Sedating every cell in me
Dissolving in the blood
The bitter flood
Friday, April 18, 2008
Tranquility II
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81 comments:
Finally the shayar is back...and how!
Damn you for writing such an awesome poem about alcohol...I feel like deleting the crap I wrote:-( But my pic was better:P
You don't drink, but you described the effects in a much nicer way than most drunkards! Clapping clapping:D
I want some right now!!
OMG, i didnt know u were a kavi also....wah wah, too good mate, told ya na earlier day by day yur just getting batter n better.....
N u dont drink, i wudnt be able to say that unless i didnt read wat crasiezt had to say
impressed again!
u write well..
but i see a lot of sadness... y so?
daru toh gum bhulane ke liye hai mere dost!!!
Cheers!!!
Were you drunk?
;) Just kidding
Oye Hoye!
Ki likh ditta!
Back to what you do best :P
I lovey this one...bitter flood..Aye!
if not fo d pic...mujhe kabhi na samajh aata janab madira ki baat kar rahe hain!!
fuck it... tablets are enough to sedate me buddy .. shit it is ... :-(
pray ki main zinda bach jaaun to have a taste of my bacardi ...
Hello. This post is likeable, and your blog is very interesting, congratulations :-). I will add in my blogroll =). If possible gives a last there on my blog, it is about the Impressora e Multifuncional, I hope you enjoy. The address is http://impressora-multifuncional.blogspot.com. A hug.
I wanna drink til I hv no life left in me.
Keshi.
Crazy:
Shayar ! Sunte hi majnu, devdaas wali feeling aati hai :|
And your poem wasn't crap, I liked it, it was fun and honest. And indeed your pic was better, you are the one with "Models wali jawline" afterall :P
Thanku thanku, am very happy that you liked it and as for the want, will make you some tangy cocktail :D
Anvita:
Hey, thanks a lot. I wonder you never noticed that there are more poems on my blog than the sum of all other types of posts :D
And yep, I don't drink :)
Ankur:
Thanks a lot. Aur gum hai tabhi to bhulana hota hai mere bhai. Baaki its just a post, neither daaru, nor gum here. Welcome and keep visiting :)
Macadamia:
Yep, high on water :P
Reeta:
Thanku ji, been a long time :)
Gunj:
Itni bakwas hai kya ????
Geet:
Abey oye, get well soon ! May god shower all the bacardi on you, Amen !!
Multifuncional:
Thanks :)
Keshi:
May lord bless you with all the money and spare kidneys to afford that, hic :P
Alok:
Thanks and welcome !
who wants spare kidneys if the aim is to drink til I hv no life in me? :)
Keshi.
Hahaha majnu aur tu...biggest joke ever:P
I know you liked my poem. You're the reason I even posted it:-) FU for that jawline comment. Grrrrr
Vaise it's difficult to say what's better...your poem or the cocktail:D Loved both..sooooo much. Mmmmuah my personal bartender:D
hmmm frankly i havent yaar, have been damn busy off late my frist week i started to blog n i was fine bloody uske baad se i have been busy, but i shud read yur other poem soon....until then rock on....i still cant digest u dont drink....bada sharif banda hai yaar
didnt have a clue you were talking about drink. flowing drown the drain?? sad, i say! :)
Keshi:
The longer you hang on to life, the more time you have to drink :P
Crazy:
Oye majnu jaisi feel bola...itni buri haalat nahi hui hai ki majnu ho jaun :D
And thank you ji, I feel honoured ki meri wajah se aapne apna wo masterpiece blop pe chipkaya. And since you are finding it difficult to choose one, enjoy both, hehehe, mmmmuah !
Anvita:
Busy on personal front or busy on blogging scene ??
Par not drinking ko sharafat ka criterion kyon mana jaata hai. Mere liye to acha hi hai waise, hehehe
Gypsy:
Was it that bad ???
I am very impatient when it comes to poetry and try to avoid reading OR writing it :P So I appreciate anyone who can read/write/patiently analyze it :D
*Life flowing down the drain*
Dude! why? heheh it's just thoda sa daaru
*Sedating every cell in me*
again, dude!
*The bitter flood*
sigh!
And no, I don't drink as well. But I think people when drunk look funny and stupid. It's okay if not overdone, right?
Waaaaaoooo!!
I mean, really Waaaaoooooowwww!!
Utterly strong and immensely deep piece of writing!!
Take a bow, Saaarrr. :)
"Water competing for transparency
Against the walls of opaque ice"
.... and then somebnody said it was about alcohol
last line say so too... yaar prose hi likha kar... may be poem is too hard to go down well with me, i was not able to appreciate and enjoy, honest as usual... OR explain maadi.
:) didnt mean it was bad.. i just didnt get it till i started reading the comments
Of course I'm enjoying both. Dono tere hi to product hain ladke:D
Maine majnu kahan banaya tujhe...I was referring to the "feeling" which is so not you!
Super weird that a lotta people didn't understand that you wrote this lovely piece about alcohol, and had to read the comments to figure out:P
If Im drinking to death, Im not hanging on to life right? LOL!
Keshi.
wah bhai wah
chup te fatte
phor ditte t-tte
nazaara aa gya !!!
wow is the word...I am in actual meaning and sense...awed !
b'ful idea, nicly put, simple and precise...gr8 piece...
Quarterpastseven:
LOL, yes...it is funny as long as they are not puking. Moreover, I am not saying anywhere that drinking is bad :P
Sutta:
Thanks ver much :D
but me no saar :( I am happy being sarji :P
Chacha:
Arre itna load kaahe lete ho chacha...jo inferece nikalta ho thik hai, kuch bhi nahi nikalta ho to ignore maadi, hehehe
Gypsy:
k :)
Crazy:
Ab saare teri tarah BOND nahi hote na :P
Keshi:
If death is the motive and not drinking, why waste so much money and alcohal, there are cheaper means :P
Kidding, got your point :D
Friendly Guy:
Kaade t-tte phorte bhraji :P
waise dhanwaad ji !!
Rashi:
Thanks very much :)
:D
o gawd!
Keshi.
**If death is the motive and not drinking, why waste so much money and alcohal, there are cheaper means
wut wud u possibly gain by saving money when ur a dead man? LOL!
Keshi.
Crazy:
Mmmmmuah chamiya :D
Keshi:
O C'mon Keshi, don't be all so-selfish now. I was talking about saving money and alcohal for all the near and dear ones left behind :P
Love the lines "Life flowing down the drain, soaking every thread and grain"
lol that argument isnt valid at all!
Keshi.
Mmmmmmuah mere tinde:D
Saar, aapke keyboard ki ink khatm ho gayi kya?
Kuch likhte kyun nahi. :P
Akshay:
Thanks and welcome :)
Keshi:
LOL, agree :D
Crazy:
Mmmuah :D
Sutta:
Nahi bhai, ink to khtm nahi hui, samay ka abhaav hai thoda ...jaldi hi kuch aayega :D
Ah! interesting :D
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
here's some news for ya GC:
u havent updated ur blog in a while.
LOL!
Keshi.
i cudnt agree less keshi :p update update
Aila another one!!
Mmmmuah
Waise i dont drink... but somehow liked the word's-play... too kewl.. to read..
Take care..
Omi
My brain can't handle alcohol but am definately always high on water!!! Nice play on words.
Macadamia:
Thanks :)
AA:
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm :D
Keshi:
Yep! Been very busy lately !!
Elusive:
Will will :D
Crazy:
Hehehe :P
Big Omi:
Thanks Man ! Don't drink myself though !!
Welcome :)
Tairebabs:
Lol, thanks and welcome :)
abey ..tu ab paise kamaane laga gaya blog ke zariye hainn!!
hey hey how are u?
mate i have been busy on the work front yaar....
btw its great that u dont drink but u can think like someone who does.....gosh i still dunno how ppl do that yaar....
Hey. Great Blog dude....and awesome lines here....
Hey. Great Blog dude....and awesome lines here....
post update karne ke bhi paihe lega tu ???
good one dude!! nicely written ..simple and brilliantly articulated :)
keep posting
Geet:
Oye yaar abhi to dukaan kholi hai, kamai shuru to hone de :P
Pranay:
Thanks man and welcome :)
Anvita:
Hey, am good. Been very busy myself....and as for thinking, usmein kya hai, don't drink but have seen many drinking, its easy, hehehe :D
Geet;
Oye yaar, busy si, hun update karta :D
nefariousoutlook:
Thanks very much and keep visiting :)
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