Bodies entangled
Skin brushing against skin
Heat rising and falling
A false sense of numbness
engulfs the mind
The air is charged up
and the sweat is dripping
The lights are fazing
and the view is hazy
The vibes running
through the spine
beat after beat
You can't defeat
the music's heat
54 comments:
The First comment should be the best...praising you to the hilt...but ahem! I'm the honest bitch so unfortunately that ain't gonna happen:P
The poem is nice of course. But not as awesome as some of your previous work..It's somehow not very mellifluous...no rhyming initially, and then the last few lines are. I dunno if it's a style of poetry. If it is, then I don't like it too much.
But as always, a lovely picture!
Have to say one thing though...what you've described in the poem is amazing in real life...especially when it's you and me:D
I like what the picture is trying to tell and it's synchronization with your words. It was about time for a new post!!!
:) hot n sexy..
false sense of numbness-
yehh man, i think people can switch on n off as they like it. wen ya wanna feel nuttin else, yeh ya want tat blessed numbness, and ya're blessed with it..
n the previous post! nikita-i'm almost there..
haaaaa- ya really got me there..
ya really are a woman-flitter- twas a gud read :)
mere examz aane waale hai!!:|
i need to concentrate n ofcoz with such inputs from you...i dont my engg is gettin ova anytime soon!!
butt u can still keep writin such stuff...padai to hoti rahegi...abhi aish karne ka time hai :P
Crazy:
Thank you Ms. Anton Ego but I don't crave for praises so you can give your honest opinion honestly. Sometimes I write poems, sometimes stories but sometimes I'm in the mood of writing neither, hence the outcome ! And in real life, it is indeed amazing :D
Akshay:
Yep, its been long since I posted something, been busy with work. Thanks :)
Rantravereflect:
Agree and can be your tranquilizer shot !
And nikita-LOL, fictional words, thanks and welcome :)
Gunj:
Oye, all the best for your exams ! Aur engg mein kab se padhai hone lag gayi...abhi aish kar le...baad mein na to time milega na hi teri umar rahegi :P
As usual I loved this one as well.
Intense and deep.
I laauuve it! :D
Bravo!!!! Night at a disco described in such an way....and I also liked ur rhyme scheme...interesting and new.
Sutta:
Sutta baba ki jai ho !!
Dhanyawaad maharaj, jo aapki kripa-drishti padi is naacheez ki bakwaas par :D
Pranay:
Thanks very much doctor sahab :)
yay goney is back in action n HOW! sexy stuff..i loved the picture n the heart made randomly wit the chain awesum it is..
@crasiezt OMG!
@gonecase..U R SID!!
@both of u..i liked crazys comment more than the poem :p
wow!!!
seriously its rhymes a lot!!!
and its sensous!!! :D
hehe
Cheers!!!
P.S. tu hai kidhar???
Interesting. Descriptive, ironically through minimum usage of words.
Suggestion? "Music's heat"--needs to go. Also, "air is charged up"--very cliched. Try replacing it with something more creative? Of course, you're the poet, so it rests entirely upto you, but just trying to help out :)
You really can't :)
http://virtuously.blogspot.com/
Yaar i have become a fan of yur writings man......
good on ya u write so well.....man i am seriously thinking of a crash course from u.....basics atleast wat say eh?
Wow... for moment I thought it was something else... ;)
hmmm this sounds like gonecase now...
good hai...
like the picture... thank God wo daraawni wali type ki nahi lagayi :P
Halfway I guessed it was about a Disco!
Now is that a good thing or a bad thing, dunno. :^D
Anyways, it was pretty concise, and effective!
well written man!!
really liked the photo..goes well with the theme of the poem
keep posting dude
Your template reminds of a video by Opeth.
Try searching for "Porcelain Heart" on Youtube!
Awesome song!
Poerty need not be rhyming all the time. This kinda reminded me of the "ode to smelly socks" that I wrote in my seventh grade and in public interest refrain from posting here.
My name is not relevant and I am the Angry Indian
www.angryindian.com
Elusive:
That is "I Love Music" :D
Thanks !
Btw, how do you know my name ??
And as for the crazy's comment, wo professional writer hai aur mein amateur :)
Ankur:
Thanks very much sir...thoda sa job ki wajah se busy tha !!
Five silver rings:
Thanks for the tips and thanks for dropping by, keep visiting :)
Enigma:
Thanks for dropping by, will check yours too :)
Anvita:
Kyon bhare bazaar le rahi hai, I just scribble ! I'm glad that you like this crap, hehehe !!
J:
That was the whole idea :P
Skeety:
Shukriya shukriya and as for the picture, agli wali waisi hi hai, hehehe :P
Alok:
Ab IITians koi chote-mote log thodi hote hain, thanks and keep visiting :)
Nefariousoutlook:
Thanks and keep visiting :)
Alok:
Will check out for sure, thanks !
Angry Indian:
Agree with the first line, it need not rhyme !
And as for the public interest, its a personal call, I post whatever I want to, if somebody doesn't like it, he/she can ignore it, its as simple as that. Thanks and keep visiting :)
Amazing!! Reminds me to the times me and my friends lost it while dancing to Paul Van Dyke!!!
Thanks :)
And Paul Van Dyke ?? Live ????
Nice one again...
my feets have already started tapping...
long time didn't visited any music store..... Time to go for one... and hunt some good music...
Tc.
omi
oh am a smart-assed spy ;) i jus put 2 n 2 together ya..i mean crazys comment n remembered a post on her blog abt it being her boyfriend SID's birthday :p
p.s. i will be too embarassed if my spygiri isnt right this time :D
Big Omi:
Thanks :)
But you still buy music ??? Its been ages since I bought some ;)
Elusive:
Oh! Its more of mathematics than spygiri, very ishmart calculation :P
Ohho! Johanybravo turning into 'Demon Barber of the fleet street' eh? :P
Saar, yeh ads hatao na.
Kuch kamayi hoti hai kya inse real mein? :O
oye.. sweeney todd !!! kya template uthaaya hai sahi...
"beat after beat
You can't defeat
the music's heat "
o yea... thats what happens to me when i hit a disc...
good one
man i wasnt kidding i was serious
I swear I had left comments on your blog and you even replied to it.. But now they're gone :O ! You owe me an explanation, Mister!
oops! It wasn't this one! My bad. Apologies.. it's just jet lag!
Sutta:
Abhi to dukaan kholi hai gurudev, kamai ka to baad mein pata chalega !!
Geet:
Shukriya shukriya :D
Anvita:
Thanks :)
Quarterpastseven:
Oye ! Didn't get it !!
"Bodies entangled
Skin brushing against skin"
there's nothing like human contact/warmth
Noelia:
Indeed !
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