Monday, April 14, 2008

I took L out of Lover


It’s been three months now since I broke up with Nikita. Even wearing the tees gifted by her didn’t hurt anymore, so I can conclude that it’s all over. I scrapped Tanu to check if she’s around; I’ve been very active at Orkut lately, the forum where I met her. My first scrap was a hysterical comment on one of her pictures, a trademark. And to my surprise, her reply had an equally potent punch, a quality that caught my attention and my fancy, same time.

I was about to leave when she called in to cancel our movie plan. We were to meet at “The Forum” yesterday for a late night show. My mind was lost in thinking all the possible reasons for her canceling our date; some last minute urgency was her excuse. I was knocked out of my thoughts with a shrill sound. My phone displayed “Tanu calling”. Hey, I’m sorry for yesterday. I’m going to Fuga tonight, wanna join me there, she sounded excited.

And our next first date was planned. Just look at yourself Mr. Gandalf, look at your beard, and better get a haircut as well. Shoot! Its already 5 PM and going by Bangalore’s deadline to city’s nightlife, I should be there by eight. The barber was busy as always. A swarm of wannabe doods getting facials, uncles getting their almost vanished strands coloured and a couple of friendly neighbourhood spidermans spinning their cobweb on the TV remote, a typical scenario.

Bhaiya, a shave and a haircut, normal spiked, how much time is it going to take, I enquired. Those fifteen minutes ended after almost two hours but I was definitely looking better, cleaner and more human. I always made sure that I comply with the basic rules: look good, smell good and taste good. And looking good never meant that one should be good looking, it’s just that one should be presentable and it was time to take care of this requisite. After emptying half of my wardrobe, I finally found my outfit for the evening, my last clean t-shirt, a spunky black one with an almost clean pair of blue jeans. Sometimes, it’s good to be a guy, at least while dressing up.

There she was, standing in her shimmering red top and a black mini, her raven black hair falling freely over her fragile shoulders and an oh-so radiating body. Man! She is hot, I thought and was thanking my lucky stars that she was my date for the evening. As the dance floor warmed to the house, we swayed after downing a couple of tequila shots. Things were heating up as the temperature was rising. She drew my face closer to her and what followed was a long lingering kiss.

More kisses were exchanged and we landed up at my place. She was standing in the dark shadows, her sculptured body silhouetted against the backdrop of lust simmering into steam. Our warm breath creating a music with the raised heartbeats. The eyes met eyes and mirrored the feeling; wrapped in my arms, those eyes succumbed and I to her gentle embrace. Lips were locked and the escorts were removed, two bodies melting into one.

Oh Nikita ! I am getting there baby…

53 comments:

crasiezt said...

What a title! What a picture! What a story! I'm in love with your writing style Mr AWESOME STORYTELLER!

Hahaha for the barber shop's scene:D

As for the "basic rules" funda...I can vouch that you follow all 3:D

And and and that line was so funny..."Sometimes, it’s good to be a guy, at least while dressing up." Vaise I still prefer being a girl while dressing up!

The last para seems familiar by the way:P

End ke liye taaliyan...that was the last thing I expected. Climax mein anti-climax *if you know what I meaan...hehehe"

Keshi said...

great pic and great read!

Keshi.

anusha said...

ha ha..... nice read ..... btw th best part of being a gal is the dressing up part ((if one's in th mood to do so ))

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

look good, smell good tak to thik tha...but how do u taste good.?? i need tips plz :P

freesherry said...

ab kya kahun main.. ap to short story king ho gaye hn..
but why does every story u write have a whiff of non-fiction?? ;) :P

Pri said...

looks like u starting a new trend---PASSION WRITING!!:p

cheers!!

Anonymous said...

Yes, after that last post, you SO needed to write something like this ;).. Don't chinta.. after reading this post, I am more than convinced of your *ahem* identity.. I know you are not exploring new horizons anymore :P

I like your writing style! It's interesting!

Mysterious Mia said...

again another good one mate.
I'd agree with freesherry that yur stories do have a wiff of non fiction hmmmmmmm, but interesteing stuff.

BTW the tequilla shots always do the wonder isnt it? hehehe

chacha said...

Amazing story Sir,
Sahi hai champ ho gaye ho aap so much so that I am not writing any of my usual philosophical crap on this.

Nice make believe stuff, I almost landed up all the scenarios/places you described and visualized the whole plot.

Kudos Sir

Gypsy said...

:) nice twist at the end.. sounds incredibly familiar :) good post!

Ankur said...

dood... now if u gonna tell me this too is fiction.. then FO... i cant believe it dost...

i wont take ur word even if u say this is fiction... it sounds more than real... u cant play arnd :)

and i can relate it to wat u commented on my post...

U write well anyways...
Cheers!!!

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Crazy:
Thanks very much lady, I'm glad that you liked it :)
And I too prefer you being a girl while dressing up :P
Yes, the last paragraph is familier, hehe and I know what you mean by climax/anti-climax, you naughty naughty girl ;)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Keshi:
Thanks a lot :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Anusha:
LOL, and it can be quite irritating when one has to wait because of that :D
Thanks and welcome :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Gunj:
Aji tasting good to simple hai, keep some mint handy. You might not like the taste but your partner will definitely appreciate it over a stale mouth :P

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Sherry:
Short story king, lol...abhi tak to meri dukaan bhi nahi khuli hai, kyon maze leti hai ?? And the non-fiction factor is there because it can happen in real life as well, though its fiction yet :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Pri:
Its all about the mood :D

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Quarterpastseven:
Yeah, I know what you mean ;)
But exploring new horizons anymore, I never did. And thanks very much, keep visiting :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Anvita:
That's very flattering, thanks :)

Can't comment on tequila shots, never had any, but have seen them working wonders :D

Reeta Skeeter said...

Saare ke saare story teller ban jao bas...3rd one from you...

MiNi said...

Sahiiiiiii
It reminds me of Mills & Boons.. probably they should ask you out now!

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Chacha:
Thanks chacha, bus aapki chatr-chaya mein koshish kar rhe hain par aapke gyaan ke prakaash hamara maargdarshan karta rehta hai, usse daalte raha kijiye :D

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Gypsy:
Thanks. But familier ?? makes me wonder :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Ankur:
LOL...bhai, pitai mat karna par this is fiction too :P
Thanks :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Skeety:
Chal acha hai na, budhape mein kaam aayega talent :P

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Mini:
Thanks...I hope they do, name and fame both, hehe :D

Macadamia The Nut said...

Lol! Sometimes you leave me wondering what was real and what wasn't

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Fact or fiction, both start from F, lol :P

Ankur said...

@gonecase

tujhe bura laga... i m sorry... :)
dont deny and accept it now :D

bro, i really m honored to read u... u make me believe wat u write, tats a big quality u have...

keep it up!!!

Cheers!!!

crasiezt said...

Feels very weird when you refer to me as "lady". Inni izzat ki aadat ni hai na:P

kyamaloom said...

As usual story telling was GREAT!
Start to finish, no faltu ke dragging plots. But just a query why all of your ending end at sex? :P

Chal anyways, tu bade kaam ki cheez lagta hai bhai. (Nahi nahi, galat na sochna). These words come from the filmmaker in me. :P

Rashmi said...

good story, lovely blog, excellent pictures...

Solitaire said...

OOOOOOPS!

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Sutta:
Thanks. As for the endings, I am a sex maniac, its roz ka doze for me, I'm obsessed with it :P

Aur bhai bolne ke baad galat nahi sochna tha, baaki zamana bada khraab hai mere bhai, hehe. Aur aapke andar ke filmmaker ke liye "shukriya shukriya" :D

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Rashmi:
Thanks and welcome :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Solitaire:
Yep

Unknown said...

Nostalgia... or just plain mindf'ed??

Mysterious Mia said...

I guess u an sutta can team up n do some great stuff eh? hehehe

Mysterious Mia said...

BTW, keep up at yur story writing....it just gets interesting day by day

Satanic Angel said...

u have the innate capability to leave ur readers wondering- kya yeh fiction thha? especially the ever so inquisitive indian readers :p chal me no pareshan u, mast story!n excellent anti-climax, post climax.

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

J:
Fiction fiction all the way

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Anvita:
Lets see, hehehe
And thanks, will try. Baaki to sab office walon ke haath mein hai :P

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Elusive:
lol, yeah, these kind of stories have been happening a lot recently :P
Thanks and keep visiting :D

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Ankur:
Oops, sorry, missed it somehow !
Aur nothing as such, bura kaahe lagna tha !! And thanks very much, I'll try to improve :)

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Crazy:
Oye sorry hai, miss ho gaya :| Mujhe pata hai gaali padengi badi saari par sach mein, pata nahi kaise miss ho gaya...
As for the izzat, naari jaati ka samman karna hi chahiye :P

crasiezt said...

Mera hi miss hona tha!!
I can totally understand "Goney". Inni saari "babes" jo aati hain tere page pe. Mera chota sa comment kho gaya bheed mein:-(
Izzat tu babes ki karta hai, baaki to sab fake hai, otherwise mujhe reply zaroor aaya hota:-(

Akshay said...

Barber shop scene cracks me up completely....they have been after my life to get highlights done to my hair..... "Sir aap to hairs highlight karwa lo... bahut cool lagoge" bull crap....Nice title too...

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Crazy:
Oye nautanki...ye tera 'Goney' samajh raha hun mein ! Aur izzat doosri babes ki karta hun par chumma to tujhe hi chipkata hun na :P

Gonecase aka. Shutter Singh said...

Akshay:
Thanks man...par mujhe aapke hairs mein colour nahi dikh raha hai is pic mein, still hot eh , hehehe

dRoZzY!!! said...

now that's what i call a nice bed time story.

i hope you would have carried on for a couple of more paragraphs.

and the closing line was a bit cheeky....
"Oh Nikita ! I am getting there baby…"

how i interpret this is totally personal.
that's why i said you should have carried on for a few more paragraphs. women like men who last longer....

just kidding. i am sure you last much longer than that.

@gunj: to taste better, i feel it's always good to scrape your tongue, spit or swallow even if mint is handy. there should be no food stuck as cud in your mouth especially food that you did not have with your partner. toothpaste is a better option as compared to mint as it is stronger but it totally dries your mouth. use toothpaste only if your partner is so hot that you salivate all throughout.
:)

crasiezt said...

Good damage control:D Pitne waala tha tu:P

Anonymous said...

"Lips were locked and the escorts were removed, two bodies melting into one."

Loooooved how you ended it. very sweet post.

ranjana said...

i think the title of the story is the best