Sunday, July 20, 2008

Feed the rain


Tear drops on window pane

in a room of a gloomy house

Where the shadows are blind

lies a mortal, eyes wide open

Two pillows and a sheet

and the melancholy of water

tearing the heart of sky

what music to a shattered soul

21 comments:

crasiezt said...

Finally an update from Mr Superbusy!Orkut kam kar..blog update kiya kar:P

I could just see everything you wrote about..so real..so heart breaking..but it's temporary so why fret..in some time there'll be 2 mortals there..and gloom will have to look for a different address:-)

Lovely poem of course (what else can I expect from you) and an equally powerful picture to go with it..*claps for the maestro*

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

kya haal bana rakha hai? kuch lete kyon nai? :P

Anonymous said...

update after a long long time yaar.

good lines!!!

Akshay said...

and the melancholy of water

tearing the heart of sky


These two lines have an amazing chemistry... welcome back...

kyamaloom said...

Honestly, reading your poems since so long. Its possible that now one can find it a bit cliched or say bit expected.

But, your words.
Your words make all the difference.
The scene may seem to be the same kinda again, but your lines are beautiful and soo profound!! Amazing choice sir!!

Really!

Scribblers Inc said...

yaar...chill...goth is like nice and I like black...and I like your poem to...but trust me...lets write happy stuff..:)

Scribblers Inc.

Unknown said...

Ethereal.

I like it, the picture it paints. It reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe.

But most importantly, my brain recognises the atmosphere of the poem.

Mysterious Mia said...

mate all work n no play makes jack a dull boy......

itna kaam mat kiya kar....good to see u update....

rantravereflect/ jane said...

beautiful melancholy.. but ya got to be here more often :(:(:(

two pillows n a sheet..
i take it as two women n one love ;)
is tat y ya aren't here???:)

Pranay said...

The end just takes it to greater heights and deeper depths too.Amazing thought.

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Reeta Skeeter said...

back to it..are u..huh

Anonymous said...

You know you write something.. and then go missing for a month! tch tch.. nahi chalega :P

Pranay said...

Dude where are you??!!!
You've been tagged...I think you'd find it interesting. Check it out... Bye.

Beauty and the BEast said...

Eyes had run dry
But the skies were still crying
The winds howling in pain

Hopes were all beaten
Dark clouds shut the day
And lightning kept knocking in vain


Am sorry have been back after a long time.. but your words still inspire.. :)

anu!~ said...

HNMM..therez so much depth in what uve written..nice..
:)

Anonymous said...

hey pal! Where have you been? No updates... Trust all is well. If it work, change your job immediately. LOL.

Rain Girl said...

oh gorgeous...loved it totally!!

Tairebabs said...

please update your readers miss your writings?

Unknown said...

soulful:)

Amandeep Singh said...

strong words
good piece